thriller opening sequence feedback

strengths
Titles are good on the black background.The music goes well with the action. Pace of music is good.Set scene very effectively. Clear understanding of the piece portrayed. Mystery of killer is good. Good use of shots and an understandable storyline leaving questions unanswered which is good. Also good use of shots.

improvements
Titles unreadable. Broke copyright rule. Music could use serious editing does not fit the flow of shots and titles appear rushed. needs a more scary location. the music changed to often. Need to change the colour of the titles. Simple and not mysterious. Too much use of same object. Not a very active piece. Could of used some video filters on certain clips to make it more thriller like.

overall
overall our criticism was constructive. there were fair comments amongst the strengths and improvements. however some comments were unclear and was not very constructive eg. accused of breaking copyright rules?

shot list- shot locations

school hall-

shot 9-postman changing.
shot 6-cutting letters.
shot2/4/7/10-changing of the clock times.

Classroom-

shot 18-the killing.
shot 3-cleaning weapon.
shot 14-keys.
shot 16-opening letter.

house-

shot 1- bed
shot5-cooking breakfast
shot8-eating breakfast.
shot 11-choosing clothes.
shot 15-letters dropping.

outside-
shot 12-postman goes outside
shot13-postman walks to house